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"Plain English is clear, straightforward expression, using
only as many words as are necessary. It is language that avoids
obscurity, inflated vocabulary and convoluted sentence construction.
It is not baby talk, nor is it a simplified version of the English
language. Writers of plain English let their audience concentrate
on the message instead of being distracted by complicated language.
They make sure that their audience understands the message easily."
Professor
Robert Eagleson
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The
main goal in writing is to put your message across clearly and
concisely. Readers want an effortless, readable and clear writing
style. Plain English is clear English it is simple and
direct but not simplistic.
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Newspapers
such as the Financial Times or the Washington Post;
magazines such as The Economist, Time and Newsweek;
and best-selling books use the straightforward, plain English
style. Why? Because professional writers and editors know a clear
style helps their readers understand and absorb the information
presented.
Around 90 percent of the newspaper subeditors time spent
improving an article for publication is cutting, simplifying and
rearranging the words into a clearer style. Heres a typical
subeditors redraft of a press release. The subeditor is
breaking the poor writing habits of the author, to produce a better
and stronger writing style.
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Original Press Release
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A
leading industry expert, Mr Bob Jones, head of the Small
Business Bureau, claimed today the Governments proposal
to introduce minimum working week legislation will require
wider public consultation to be undertaken. If the government
follows this advice, interested parties will be given an
opportunity to understand and raise their concerns prior
to the legislation being enacted by Parliament. Industry,
trade bodies and unions need to study the draft bill before
the Government introduces this new law, said Mr Jones.
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Mr
Bob Jones, head of the Small Business Bureau, said of the
Governments 35-hour working week proposal: Industry,
trade bodies and unions need to study the draft bill before
the Government introduces this new law.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words: 80
Style
Index: 75
(Poor) |
Words: 35
(56% shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent)
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Style
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English Checklist |
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Plain
English editing and a professional subeditors skills are
similar. Both use commonsense rules to guide them to produce a
more concise, clearer style. The 10 most important editing principles
are:
1. Think
of your readers needs.
2. Organize your content well.
3. Write in a natural style as if you were talking
to the reader.
4. Keep sentences short.
5. Use active verbs.
6. Be specific rather than general.
7. Cut all redundant words and phrases.
8. Use simpler words rather than complex words.
9. Cut down on jargon.
10. Edit vigorously.
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Writing Comes from Strong Editing |
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The
secret to becoming a better writer is to use these principles
to edit your draft. Here is a typical business memo. Good editing,
using these principles cuts its length by more than half and results
in a clearer style.
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Business Style
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The
Staff Booking Database
The
main purpose of the Staff Booking Database (SBD) is for
the recording of staff booking requests which in turn provides
the total recurring audit cost for each client.
As
a result of the recent merger that has taken place and hence
the increase in the numbers of staff and clients, it is
important that each business unit (BU) be used in such a
way as to track and collate all staff movements. The use
of the SBD allows managers in each BU to rethink on an annual
basis, the way the audit was performed and make any necessary
amendments to the amount of staff and the mix of skills
required for the following year.
Implementing
a formal process and system will not only make sure that
all staff are receiving the right type of experience and
exposure as they progress, but it should also be of assistance
in guaranteeing our clients are receiving the most suitable
mix of staff.
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The
Staff Booking Database
This
Database records staff booking requests to calculate the
audit costs for each client.
Because
the merger increased our staff and client numbers, each
business unit can now use the Staff Booking Database to
track and collate staff movements. The Database allows managers
to rethink how they perform the audit each year and change
the staff and skills needed the following year.
This
yearly review makes sure staff have the right work experience
and our clients receive the best staff to carry out each
audit.
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STYLEWRITERS
ANALYSIS |
Words: 164
Style
Index: 106
(Dreadful) |
Words:
89 (59% shorter)
Style Index: 11 (Excellent) |
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Only
one out of 50 business and government documents is in plain English.
Why? Because untrained writers draft documents full of passive
verbs, long sentences, wordy phrases, complex words and other
style faults.
The
main problem in all writing is not a grammatical slip or an occasional
typing error. We all have poor writing habits we pick up from
reading hundreds of memos, business letters and reports that come
across our desk. For every genuine grammar mistake corrected,
good subeditors will make dozens of style changes. Do you recognise
the typical business style?
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Government
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Plain
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As
the applicant, it is a requirement that you provide a mailing
address and an identification number when an application
is made for a hardship grant.
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You
need to send a mailing address and an identification number
when you apply for a hardship grant.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
26
Style
Index: 76
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Words:
18 (30 % Shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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Plain
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I
trust this clarifies the matter for you and look forward
to hearing from you in due course in respect of your decision
whether or not you intend to take out a loan.
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Please
let me know if you want to take out a loan.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
34
Style
Index: 121
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Words:
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Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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Report
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A
questionnaire was circulated to the project team that were
based internally. Of the ten people who were sent the questionnaire
only 5 replied which is somewhat disappointing. Of those
replying virtually all were aware of the history of the
pilot advertising campaign and generally speaking meeting
the aims and objectives of the company. The strategy was
viewed to be satisfactory to meet the campaigns aims
although there was some concern expressed over the limited
budget available. All respondents at a managerial level
were positive that the campaign did meet the requirements
of the company to increase its market share.
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A
disappointing five out of ten managers replied to the internal
project teams questionnaire. Of those replying:
four knew of the pilots aims,
everyone thought the strategy was satisfactory,
two thought the budget was too small.
All
managers were sure the campaign met the companys need
to increase its market share.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
95
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Style
Index: 100 |
Words:
51 (50% shorter)
Style Index: 0 (Excellent) |
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StyleWriter Helps |
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StyleWriter
helps you write in plain English by identifying words and phrases
in your writing that detract from clarity. It questions your use
of long sentences and passive verbs and aims to make you think
about every word you write.
StyleWriter does not encourage a standard style that everyone
should follow. Rather, by helping you break out of the typical
business writing style, StyleWriter encourages you to express
yourself in your own words.
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| The
Benefits of Plain English |
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What
are the savings in using plain English? |
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote in plain English?
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain English? |
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail? |
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Why
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What
are the savings in using plain English?
National
governments, councils, multinational corporations, major industry
bodies and so on have adopted the plain English model for sound,
commercial reasons plain English saves time and money.
The savings claimed for plain English are remarkable:
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The US Navy estimated plain English could save it between $250$300
million every year.
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General Electric saved $275,000 by redrafting manuals into plain
English.
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The US Department of Veterans Affairs saved $40,000 redrafting
one standard letter into plain English.
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Customers in three surveys of standard letters from banks unanimously
preferred the plain English versions.
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British Telecom cut customer queries by 25 percent by using
plain English.
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The Royal Mail saved £500,000 in nine months by redesigning
one form in plain English.
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UK businesses lose £6 billion a year because of badly written
letters.
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A UK Government Plain English initiative saved £9 million in
printing costs.
These
savings come from organizations training key staff, employing
professional writers and editors. But these people, can only edit
a few of the thousands of documents produced every day in large
organizations. Imagine the savings if you used training and editing
software to guarantee everyone used plain English in every document.
Source:
Joe Kimble Writing for Dollars
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote in plain English?
Unfortunately,
the costs of poor communication do not appear in the balance sheet.
If they did, you would do something to control them. In the following
examples, the biggest cost is staff time (authors time plus
the readers time), multiplied by the number of employees
who receive the document.
1. The
United Kingdoms National Audit Office estimated the cost
of producing one page in government departments varied between
£3.50 ($5) to over £100 ($160).
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The low figure was for a one-page letter, typed, printed and
sent to 200 people resulting in a bill £700 ($1,120).
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The higher figure was for each page of a short report that goes
through several authors and drafts, before a senior manager
presented it to the management committee. This means the cost
of such a 50-page report read by 15 senior managers was £5,000
($8,000).
2. A
government department sent a two-page memo to 15,000 employees
that took an average of 10 minutes to read and process. The real
cost to the department was $100,000 in salaries, overheads and
associated costs. The memo was about keeping staff kitchens clean!
Was it really a $100,000 problem?
3. A
bank had a sales letter rewritten by a professional, plain English
editor. The clearer, redraft brought in an extra $11 million of
new business. No conventional accounting method would record the
previous $11 million missed business opportunity.
4. One
council sent 1.3 million pages of committee reports to councillors
in one year. If councillors worked a sixteen-hour day, seven-day
week, reading a page every minute, they would eventually get through
all the documents after 3.7 years.
Try
a simple calculation
Work
out the number of sheets of paper, e-mails and faxes in your organization
produces in one working day. Estimate the cost of each of these
documents at $10 a page. Now calculate by the number of people
who have to read them and add $1 for each person reading each
document. (To give you an idea of this figure, a typical office
worker receives over 100 messages a day). That will give you rough
idea of the cost of your paperwork for each day. Then multiply
the figure by 240 to find out a realistic cost of paperwork in
your organization every year.
Plain
English will cut this bill by 30 percent.
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain English?
Today,
governments, major corporations, trade associations and professional
bodies across the world have adopted plain language as the style
for writing all documents.
For example, in the USA, presidents Eisenhower, Ford, Carter and
Clinton have all issued directives for federal employees to write
in plain language. In July 1998, President Clinton stated:
The Federal Governments writing must be in plain language.
By using plain language, we send a clear message about what the
Government is doing, what it requires, and what services it offers.
Plain language saves the Government and the private sector time,
effort, and money.
Writing
in plain language could cut the Federal Governments paperwork
by one-third, save billions of dollars and make everyones
life whether working for the government or in the private
sector much simpler and easier. Ordinary Americans should
be able to understand what their Government says to them without
having to study the text closely or to consult an expert.
The
Federal Government has worked hard to introduce clearer written
communications. Many government bodies such as Education, Transportation,
Internal Revenue Service, Securities Exchange Commission, and
Veterans Affairs have run plain-language initiatives. For two
years, the Vice-Presidents office coordinated this work
and encouraged all Federal employees to adopt a clearer writing
style. But today, perhaps only one in fifty Federal employees
uses a plain language style.
US
Government runs plain English software pilot
The
US Federal Government is now running a trial of Editor Softwares
StyleWriter and Electronic Writing Course. The Environmental
Protection Agency is using both programs to train staff in
plain English editing skills and to evaluate the software for
use throughout in other department and agencies.
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail?
Most
organizations recognize customer letters, brochures, e-mails,
management reports should be clear and concise but most documents
fail any basic, plain English test.
The
traditional response has been to put employees on business writing
courses and expect one days tuition to transform the way
they think and write. In tests, people going on traditional business
writing courses often showed little improvement in writing style.
Statistics on writing style show there is typically only a 10
percent improvement one week after the course and a month later
most participants fell back to their pre-course standard.
There
are many reasons for this failure. Here are the important ones.
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The culture of business and government
encourages poor writing. Most peoples writing
style comes from the documents they see around them. So unless
you train everyone in effective writing, improving writing standards
is difficult.
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Most people think they do write clearly,
although at least 80 percent of documents in organizations are
badly written and full of poor style faults. It always
comes as a shock when people see how much clearer documents
can become with strong editing.
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Managers believe the problem is never
with their writing style, but with the style of their staff.
Managers happily send their staff to writing courses. But after
the course, the managers continue to redraft the new, clearer
style back into management-speak. The unspoken message to the
person trying to write clearly is: Dont write clearly,
write as I do.
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writers are so close to their jargon and style they cannot see
their writing faults. Most writers have no idea why
others find their documents difficult to read and understand.
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people falsely believe the long-winded, complex style of business
and government is the expected and agreed style.
Many employees look at existing documents and copy the style.
This means people who normally speak clearly and write well,
quickly pick up the bad writing habits and stilted style of
their colleagues.
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people learned to write at university and college where length
and an impressive vocabulary seemed to be a virtue.
Yet in the workplace, everyone wants short and clear documents
to make their lives easier.
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Only one person in 50 attends training in effective writing.
Organizing and running courses is time-consuming and expensive.
If you use outside consultants to run them, they can cost up
to $1,500 for ten people. Plain language software is much more
economical.
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Theres no backup to put any effective writing training
into practice.
Most people only remember one-third of the training ideas and
put even fewer into practice. Plain English editing software
means writers constantly learn ways to improve their style.
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Why
does plain English software guarantee success?
To
guarantee everyone in an organization writes clearly, you need
to change the communication culture, train staff and give them
the tools to back up the training. This has proved impossible
without software.
In
the same way running a spelling checker on your word processor
guarantees everyone writes without typing and spelling mistakes,
plain English software can guarantee the benefits of clear writing.
Organizations can immediately train all staff using our Electronic
Writing Course. Each employee can then run StyleWriter
through letters, memos and reports until drafting in plain English
becomes the standard throughout the organization. Organizations
can also work with us to create an Electronic House Style
to make sure every document keeps to your house-style rules and
conventions.
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